First I have to say you write very well. I like your texts and also your stories. About Reunited, I loved until chapter 04 more or less. After this, I still like, but not with all the love I felt in the beggining. I think I have two problems:
1) I miss Torchwood people scenes. Even though I love Jack and love Rose as well, the parts when Torchwood shows up are simply great ^_^.
2) This 86 years old Rose is strange. I can't see Rose when I read. I mean, I can imagine she will be like this if she lives all the things your Rose lived, but it's strange to me to read a story and create a new Rose iin my mind, because what I'm reading isn't the Rose all of us know. And imagine this mature personality in her 19 years old body is even stranger. I also think Jack doesn't love her with all this 'my true and only love for now on' kind of feeling. I always thought Jack loved Rose as he likes and cares for Gwen, but with a stronger feeling. I mean, of course he loves Rose and likes her more than any other person in the word, aside, perhaps, the Doctor, but it's not a one true love for life, you know? Ok, I know this is YOUR story and you can do whatever you like, because it's your plot, but I had to say how I see things. Maybe that's whay I'm feeling a little of disconfort on later chapters. But your story is great and I'm eager for new chapters...even with this granny Rose ^_^.
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Date: 2007-05-26 01:38 am (UTC)About Reunited, I loved until chapter 04 more or less. After this, I still like, but not with all the love I felt in the beggining. I think I have two problems:
1) I miss Torchwood people scenes. Even though I love Jack and love Rose as well, the parts when Torchwood shows up are simply great ^_^.
2) This 86 years old Rose is strange. I can't see Rose when I read. I mean, I can imagine she will be like this if she lives all the things your Rose lived, but it's strange to me to read a story and create a new Rose iin my mind, because what I'm reading isn't the Rose all of us know. And imagine this mature personality in her 19 years old body is even stranger.
I also think Jack doesn't love her with all this 'my true and only love for now on' kind of feeling. I always thought Jack loved Rose as he likes and cares for Gwen, but with a stronger feeling. I mean, of course he loves Rose and likes her more than any other person in the word, aside, perhaps, the Doctor, but it's not a one true love for life, you know?
Ok, I know this is YOUR story and you can do whatever you like, because it's your plot, but I had to say how I see things. Maybe that's whay I'm feeling a little of disconfort on later chapters.
But your story is great and I'm eager for new chapters...even with this granny Rose ^_^.